Messages in bottles
Tide’s passengers
Intrigue
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This is an example of Reverse Hay(na)ku.
In the ‘reverse’ haynaku, the longest line is placed first and the shortest last. The total is still 6 words: 3 in the first line, 2 in the second line, and 1 in the third line.
© rgb for “On Dragonfly Wings with Buttercup Tea”, 2011
"On Dragonfly Wings with Buttercup Tea" 
Haynaku, Ukanyah…. I loved this every way I looked at it. Splendid!
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Ah, Captain – yer visit is a treat! 😀
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I’ve always had a dream to find one day a message in a bottle to see what will be like to maybe solve a mystery behind the message and the feeling of holding something many years old…
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Me too! Me tooo!
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Oh ! this was stunning …
and also the form 🙂 nice !
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Thank you ~~
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Wow, I love this. The second line is just fantastic. We are back on at the eyelet review…please visit again: http://theeyeletreview.wordpress.com/
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It is a fun form ~~
Yea … for The Eyelet Review!!! Will see what the muse wants to create! 😀
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I’ve never heard of this form of poetry before. Who knows what they will think of next – a one word poem? lol However, I LOVE this form and think I’ll try it myself sometime.
You’ve created such a strong image with your six words. I especially love your middle line “Tide’s passengers” – just awesome! xx
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I keep discovering new poetry forms … it is amazing to find them and see the examples and results of interpretation throughout the creative outlets of poets! Thank you for visiting and leaving feedback … Enjoy it!
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So cool–I hadn’t heard of this form before, Becca. You did so well with only six words–charming.
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Thank you, Gayle – it is a fun form – regular and/or reverse! I appreciate you visiting ~~
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Very Lovely Becca and Congratulations
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I appreciate your visit and comments – thank you!
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Love it!! Simple and elegant.
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thank you for stopping by and leaving a comment!
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wow.. so much had been said through 6 words.. And a new pattern. Amazing
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It is a fun form – as well as haynaku or hay(na)ku … I am not sure why they put it in parenthesis ~~but thank you for leaving me feedback and comment!
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Beautiful!
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thank you, ej!! have a great week!
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just awesome!
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thanks, trisha!! xoxo
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Fun form…new to me. And definitely intriguing!
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I also like it … makes me whittle down to the bone! As if, whittling a 5-7-5 isn’t challenging enough!!! 😀
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Very cool format! I love messages in bottles too. I might have to send one out to sea soon. 🙂
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And maybe I will find it! 😀
Wouldn’t that be cool?
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Indeed very intriguing. messages in bottles Great haiku
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Thank you, Marja! Happy you stopped by for a visit!
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One of my dreams, Becca – to find one. Preferably with a genie… 😀
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Me too!! 😀
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A beautiful noticing. And it is intriguing! A mystery.
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I always look for bottles when I comb the beaches ~~ an intriguing mystery and its contents!! Where did it come from? Why was it sent? What did the message say? How long and how far had it been traveling? Help? Starcrossed Loves? Bright inspiration? … ???? … ???? … ????
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