Messages in Bottles



Messages in bottles
Tide’s passengers


This is an example of Reverse Hay(na)ku.
In the ‘reverse’ haynaku, the longest line is placed first and the shortest last. The total is still 6 words: 3 in the first line, 2 in the second line, and 1 in the third line.


© rgb for “On Dragonfly Wings with Buttercup Tea”, 2011


About becca givens

Becca is an artist, poet, and animal communicator. She delights in cooking, nurturing, and sharing a rich spiritual life with others on the Path.
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32 Responses to Messages in Bottles

  1. Haynaku, Ukanyah…. I loved this every way I looked at it. Splendid!


  2. I’ve always had a dream to find one day a message in a bottle to see what will be like to maybe solve a mystery behind the message and the feeling of holding something many years old…


  3. ladynimue says:

    Oh ! this was stunning …
    and also the form 🙂 nice !


  4. honeyhaiku says:

    Wow, I love this. The second line is just fantastic. We are back on at the eyelet review…please visit again:


  5. I’ve never heard of this form of poetry before. Who knows what they will think of next – a one word poem? lol However, I LOVE this form and think I’ll try it myself sometime.

    You’ve created such a strong image with your six words. I especially love your middle line “Tide’s passengers” – just awesome! xx


    • Becca Givens says:

      I keep discovering new poetry forms … it is amazing to find them and see the examples and results of interpretation throughout the creative outlets of poets! Thank you for visiting and leaving feedback … Enjoy it!


  6. Bodhirose says:

    So cool–I hadn’t heard of this form before, Becca. You did so well with only six words–charming.


  7. Jennifer says:

    Very Lovely Becca and Congratulations


  8. thingy says:

    Love it!! Simple and elegant.


  9. deepika says:

    wow.. so much had been said through 6 words.. And a new pattern. Amazing


  10. trisha says:

    just awesome!


  11. Fun form…new to me. And definitely intriguing!


  12. Very cool format! I love messages in bottles too. I might have to send one out to sea soon. 🙂


  13. marja says:

    Indeed very intriguing. messages in bottles Great haiku


  14. souldipper says:

    One of my dreams, Becca – to find one. Preferably with a genie… 😀


  15. cloakedmonk says:

    A beautiful noticing. And it is intriguing! A mystery.


    • Becca Givens says:

      I always look for bottles when I comb the beaches ~~ an intriguing mystery and its contents!! Where did it come from? Why was it sent? What did the message say? How long and how far had it been traveling? Help? Starcrossed Loves? Bright inspiration? … ???? … ???? … ????


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