As I sit in the sun

Today as I made my rounds of favorite blogs, I came across a creative post by Gayle of Bodhirose’s Blog. Her mesmerizing post, Madness, written as part of Flash Fiction, concluded with the following interesting note:

“I came across a prompt that suggested writing a 100 word story using only one syllable words.  If you give it a try, let me know; I would love to read yours.”

So, I decided to experiment with Bodhirose’s challenge.

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As I Sit in the Sun

I waltz out the door to see what is near the deer in the sun. She looks at me and says –

“How are you, dear one?”

“I am fine, sweet doe.”

“Did you see the buds on the trees?”

“Yes, I have.”

“Did you see the hue … a nice shade of blue?”

“Yes, God chose well.”

The doe smiles; walks to the grass.  She scrootched to the ground, then looks to me. I see joy in her eyes.  Near her feet, lay her young.  In awe, she lets me pet the fawn as I sit in the sun.

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Form: “100 word – one syllable” challenge

Image Credit

© rgb for “On Dragonfly Wings with Buttercup Tea”, 2011

Prompt:
Free Verse

About becca givens

Becca is an artist, poet, and animal communicator. She delights in cooking, nurturing, and sharing a rich spiritual life with others on the Path.
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30 Responses to As I sit in the sun

  1. Jamie Dedes says:

    Sweet! Nice spin on the challenge, Becca. I enjoyed Gayle’s post as well.

    Take it easy … Drink plenty of Buttercup Tea! 🙂

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  2. tekia says:

    I love the peacefulness of the whole moment. This is very serene and beautiful. I enjoyed the read very much!!

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  3. such rich imagery – great picture – :)haikudoyou

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  4. Andy says:

    Truly creative, Becca and I love the photo you chose.

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  5. Trisha says:

    this is divine becca, just divine. what an adorable piece of writing. gayle’s post was fantastic too. she selected an awesome pic, so did you.

    your post will linger in my heart for long. 🙂 i love deers.

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  6. Jingle says:

    creative, your talent is soaring high…
    keep it up.

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  7. Good one Becca. This is a very enjoyable write!

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  8. seabell says:

    Heavenly picture! 🙂

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  9. Reflections says:

    A wonderful write… though I imagine a bit more complicated than it sounds. Beautiful!

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  10. Pat Cegan says:

    Again, BB, you delight me! Thanks! love you, pat

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  11. dani says:

    very cool, Becca! ♥ it’s a lovely story on it’s own ~ that you did it all in one syllable words is amazing!

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  12. Bodhirose says:

    Oh, you did this so beautifully, Becca–so very precious. You are a storyteller for sure. Thanks so much for joining in with the challenge.

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    • becca givens says:

      Ahh, Gayle … I am not too sure about that … but I appreciate your encouraging feedback … I found it to be an interesting exercise. Thank you for the challenge. 🙂

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  13. So sweet and gentle in the tone. I think the last line is most telling.

    GREAT story ….
    Hugs, Izzy xoxoxo

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  14. Renee Espriu says:

    I think you’ve met the challenge, well, Becca. Nicely written and look forward to more. I love your Haikus but you have other talent in writing as well, I see.

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