Lost – Can you see me?

Pitch dark woods,
emit daunting
sounds and movements
raising all hair
on my arms and neck.
My heart sprints
as my breath catches.
What direction
dare I run?
can you see me?

Image Credit

Thursday Poets Rally Week 65
(April 5-April 11, 2012)


This is my first entry in the Trifecta Writing Challenge.

Week 8 – Lost

Trifecta (weekend challenge):

Each Friday, at 10:00 am Eastern Time a weekend challenge will be posted on our main page. Each week there will be a different challenge, with different rules. All challenges will be based, somehow, on the number three. This will be a lightening fast challenge that will close on Sunday at 8:00 PM Eastern Time. All entries will be read carefully by the editors. The top three entries will be mentioned on the following week’s Monday blog post, and the best-written response will be posted in its entirety on the site.

Here are the rules for Week 8:

This weekend’s challenge is to write a story entitled ‘Lost’ in exactly 33 words. The word ‘lost’ can only appear in the title, not your 33 words. Any reference to the TV show could result in another visit to see the editors in the Trifecta offices.

I don’t know where the Trifecta offices are located — but I’d rather not find out!! 😀

© rgb for “On Dragonfly Wings with Buttercup Tea”, 2011 – 2012


About becca givens

Becca is an artist, poet, and animal communicator. She delights in cooking, nurturing, and sharing a rich spiritual life with others on the Path.
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39 Responses to Lost – Can you see me?

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  3. Raven says:

    I like this piece a lot … even before I read about Trifecta. You know … it would even do for “Sunday Tree.” (((hugs))).


  4. Suzy says:

    Oh that was spooky. nicely done.

    Someday Somewhere – Hope


  5. Kay Salady says:

    Brilliant writing. I so enjoyed this!


  6. I really loved this, especially the guardians. We all need at least one!


  7. poetryroad says:

    This is a raw and powerful and “edge of your seat writing” entry this week. Always enjoy your work!


  8. mbwilliams says:

    A primeval experience for anyone who has ventured into the woods at night. Very well captured!


  9. Tarang says:

    Nice piece of writing!:)


  10. leahJlynn says:

    That is a hunting picture with a dark and beautiful poem.


  11. An interesting challenge and you’ve risen to it magnificently, great image choice too


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  13. Very clever response to the prompt. I also read it the same way Janna did — being lost can have so many aspects –physically lost is perhaps the first thing that jumps to mind, but ‘lost’ can also describe that elusive search for that ‘something’ in our lives. You captured both beautifully. Thanks for linking up.


  14. Loved this becca.
    Thanks for the visit.


  15. I felt like she was stalked, and like she had no way of knowing if whoever found her would be a savior or the person hunting her.


  16. I like the last line best. It’s desperate but, in the slightest way, hopeful. I should go back and see if you’ve written about the Guardians before.


  17. chrstnj says:

    Beautiful image. I particularly loved “My heart sprints / as my breath catches.” The words flow so nicely together. Well done!


  18. Pat Cegan says:

    Wow, so much power in so few words. You constantly amaze and delight me, BB. hugs, pat


  19. souldipper says:

    Great response to the challenge, Becca. Well done.


  20. barbara says:

    my heart sprints . . . that is some great image!

    welcome to the challenge.


  21. JannatWrites says:

    This is really good. It makes sense in a literal sense (actually lost in a dark place) and the figurative sense (lost in life and looking for God (or if you don’t believe in God – someone) to save us.


  22. granbee says:

    Becca, I certainly think this poem of 33 words should be the winner of that “lost” challenge! Wow, you sure had me with goose bumps and looking for a lightning bug to show me the way OUT of those dark woods!


    • becca givens says:

      granbee — you are one of my greatest cheerleaders … you always make me feel so good. You are an inspirational ambassador of nurturing one’s self esteem! Thank you! 😀 I appreciate it!


  23. mairzeebp says:

    I really loved your entry.


  24. booguloo says:

    Excellent entry.


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