What were you saying?

Conversation stills
Love stained lips with bliss marked heart
What were you saying?

Image Credit

© by rgb for “On Dragonfly Wings with Buttercup Tea”, 2011 – 2012



About becca givens

Becca is an artist, poet, and animal communicator. She delights in cooking, nurturing, and sharing a rich spiritual life with others on the Path.
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9 Responses to What were you saying?

  1. Mary says:

    Some things suppress the NEED for words!


  2. granbee says:

    The voice of the heart moves the lips of the lover.


  3. Raivenne says:

    Oh, I simply love this, Becca and know the feeling all the well! Bravo!


  4. Excellent words for an intriguing picture.


  5. siggiofmaine says:

    Wonderful !
    Peace, Siggi in Downeast Maine


  6. leahJlynn says:

    Cool picture, love the Haiku that adjoined it . I’am still trying to get how to write one.


    • becca givens says:

      Although there are apparently several forms of Haiku, and the English language and its syllables do not easily convert to the Japanese version … the usual theme is around nature … other wise it is more correctly referred to as a Senyru … although most still refer to it as Haiku.

      That being said … for most of the challenges I participate … it is 3 lines, with the syllable count of 5 syllables for the 1st line, 7 syllables for the 2nd and 5 syllables for the 3rd (5-7-5) OR 3-5-3.

      Not rhyming; try to limit the use of “the”, “a”, “and”, or other filler words … paint a picture with conciseness and focus … although the first two lines are related to each other — each line should stand on its own … the first 2 lines are usually related, and the 3rd line is like a surprise! You can continue with a second “stanza: (although that is not the right word for it) and string together 2 or 3 Haiku to complete your voice. A haiku uses a few words to capture a moment; creating a picture in the reader’s mind; like a tiny window into a scene much larger than itself.

      When I first read Haiku it made absolutely no sense to me … but then I started attempting to write the more modern versions, it got easier. It helps me with focus and clarity. Every now and then, I surprise myself with a truer version of Haiku. Try it … but beware, the Haiku bug may bite!!! 😀


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  8. Karen says:

    Oh, I love this Becca!


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