Night of Bliss

A night full of bliss
Gardenia and tears mingle
Her love walks away


© rgb for “On Dragonfly Wings with Buttercup Tea”, 2011 – 2012

September Heights
Day 14

(#173 )

About becca givens

Becca is an artist, poet, and animal communicator. She delights in cooking, nurturing, and sharing a rich spiritual life with others on the Path.
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14 Responses to Night of Bliss

  1. Oh, full of emotions – gardenia and tears mingle!

  2. A revelation indeed—one that many of us have experienced (and once is enough, I might add).


  3. Geraldine says:

    very evocative, engaging all the senses.

  4. poetrydiary says:

    I like the pacing of change through this from joy to sadness, without a sudden switch, like the middle line.

  5. tigerbrite says:

    Especially love the second line, so expressive.

  6. 4joy says:

    since gardenia is one of my favorite scents (altho a bit too cloying to wear often), I read these lovely words in a miasma of sadness

  7. Patti says:

    Lovely, but sad. The first thought that came to me was, “ah, it’s the old one-night stand.”

  8. Grace says:

    Lovely but sad parting ~

  9. Jolly says:

    Lovely word picture, but there is hope.

  10. odyzz says:

    Sad yet hopes intact…captivating!!

  11. elleceef says:

    This is beautiful and sad, Becca. Although the tears could be joyful and he could be returning, it doesn’t feel like that. Nicely done.

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